I love your wide range of vocabulary, as well as the touching plot. There aren't many fics like these, and it's definitely a pleasant change. Using both language and description to create such an impact was a smart idea, very tactical. I also appreciate the fact: You are one of the few writers I know who uses punctuation properly, and that's more important than most people picture it as. Only criticism I have would be to proof read it, just to check for mistakes. Personally, I think it's clever and inspiring. Of course, I would definitely like to see more.